Phew. Okay. Wow.
The idea of this book is very interesting. Sure, vampires and werewolves and forbidden love are nothing new. But that doesn’t bother me. Go ahead and write tropes, just do it well. And the plot Jennifer has pieced together (so far) is a neat, steamy spin.
But the WRITING. I struggled to get through the first 70% of this lengthy book. It was fraught with over-explanation, pointless phrases, odd comma placement, modern real-life teenager language (totally!), and an irritating…amount…of… ELLIPSES. OH MY GOD I WILL FOREVER FLINCH AT ELLIPSES FROM NOW ON.
Honestly, the writing strongly reminds me of my own writing when I first began university. A lot of the mistakes are very, very common, and seen in most first manuscripts. But this author has written a plethora of books. Who workshops her writing? Cuts it down? Helps her polish it?
There are tiny glimpses of excellent writing tucked in this book. Most of the action scenes and smutty scenes are much stronger than the forsaken long-winded info dumps and character development. Ugh. The info dumps were so brutally bleghghgh, and I really did not enjoy reading Poppy’s internal blathering.
I feel bad about the negativity, but the sheer amount of high ratings boggles my wee brain. But I’m also fairly convinced most YA best-sellers (in smutland, anyway) are ruined for me now that I’ve been through workshop after writing workshop.
Don’t get me wrong – I’m 100% positive my writing has the same mistakes Jennifer’s does. I just would assume her editors would catch the issues and fix them, but I guess they saw ‘vampires’ and ‘wild sex’ and their eyes turned into money symbols.
Yes, I know this sounds more like a 1 or 2 star review rather than a 3 star, but my ridiculous self enjoyed the romance and the (last 30%) plot. So 3 stars it is.